Friday, May 17, 2013

Fridays With Hitchcock:
Notorious (1946)

Screenplay by Ben Hecht.

This is my favorite Hitchcock movie. The one that gets me every time I see it. Hey, REAR WINDOW is great and NORTH BY NORTHWEST is fun... but this is the one that hurts me to watch - because it makes me feel painful things. Here’s the thing about Hitchcock - he was a master of cinematic language. But just like a novelist who is a master of language, you still need to use that language in the service of a story. I believe that even the worst of Hitchcock’s movies (and we are passed most of those) contain some great scenes and interesting visual or narrative experiments. They movies may not work, but *parts* of them are amazing. And that’s the problem with all movies - a film is a combination of dozens of different arts (or 7 if you’re a fan of old Warner Bros releases) and getting all of those aspects to work at the same time, and then work together, requires a miracle. Usually some things work and some things don’t work. For me, NOTORIOUS is the Hitchcock movie that gets almost everything right at the same time, and all of that begins with the screenplay by Ben Hecht.

A film has all of those arts (or 7) that must come together, and a screenplay also has many different elements that must each work, and then work together. Your characters, your dialogue, your actions, your pacing... there are maybe a hundred different elements, and the odds of them all working on the same scripts are millions to one - which is why there are very few movies that you wouldn’t want to change a word. As screenwriters, we try to get as many elements right as we can.



Hecht was a legendary screenwriter - he wrote *fast* and also wrote great stuff. He worked on other Hitchcock screenplays, but this is the one where everything fell together perfectly... and then Hitchcock’s master of cinematic language brought that screenplay alive. Every time I watch this film (and I know the dialogue by heart) it almost brings me to tears. I get swept up in the story and forget that these are actors speaking lines - they are real people to me with some very real and messy emotional problems. All of Hitchcock’s techniques make this film *more* emotional and *more* personal. Cary Grant and Ingrid Bergman - movie stars - manage to play roles that make you forget they are movie stars. Both are so tragic, so sad, so unglamorous...

Nutshell: During World War 2, unemotional CIA Agent Devlin (Cary Grant) drafts party girl Alicia Huberman (Ingrid Bergman) to go to Rio De Janerio where Nazis are up to something. Alicia is the daughter of a traitor, and a childhood friend, Alex Sebastian (Claude Raines), is one of the Nazis in Brazil. Devlin and Alicia are two people with permanent broken hearts... but while waiting for their mission in Rio they fall in love. The mission? Alicia is supposed to screw Sebastian and find out what the Nazis are up to. So Devlin has to order the woman he loves to screw some other man! And then stick around - practically watching them screw - to get information from Alicia. Folks, this film was made in the 1940s and is shocking even today. What amazes me is how they got this thing past the censors, because the plot is: she screws a Nazi. She’s a whore for Uncle Sam. Sure, they use some euphemisms, but they make it clear that she is screwing the guy. And she discovers that they are working on an atomic bomb (which had not been invented when this film was made - which got Hitchcock in some trouble) and that’s when things go really really wrong. (Grant is actually an OSS Agent - the predecessor of the CIA - but I’m de-complicating it for this blog entry... which is not a history of USA espionage agencies.)

Experiment: Not much in the way of *story* experiments in this film, though Hitchcock did some ground-breaking shots - an amazing shot from high overhead a crowded party slowly cranes down to a close up of a key in Ingrid Bergman’s hand. All in focus, by the way. I don’t know how many recent films I’ve seen where the camera moves just a little and is out of focus. Here we get a complicated moving crane shot and it’s perfect. This shot, by the way, is a great illustration of Hitchcock’s Biggest To Smallest Theory - which we will talk about when we get to YOUNG AND INNOCENT. The film is filled with beautiful moving camera shots on difficult terrain like stairways (it was a crane shot mimicking a dolly) and none of it is showy - all of the camera movement is used to enhance the emotional experience of the story.



There's also a great subjective shot from Ingrid Bergman's character, who is in bed with a hangover, as Cary Grant enters the room and stands over her... ending up upside down from her point of view. It's a great shot because it's boozy like Bergman's character and is *exactly* what you would see if you were her.


Hitch Appearance: A guest at the big party at Sebastian’s house, gulping champagne.

Great Scenes: This is another one of those films that is all great scenes, so we are going to look at some of the elements that makes those scenes great.

Opening Scenes: NOTORIOUS opens with a title card with date and time, setting this story is reality. Inside a criminal court building, reporters wait outside and one opens the doors to the courtroom so that we can evesdrop on the end of the trial... Just in time for the defendant, Huberman, to rant about how the worst is yet to come... and then be found guilty for *treason* as an agent of the Nazis. Like in REAR WINDOW, the audience becomes voyeurs. Seeing this through a cracked open courtroom door makes it seem more real. Then Alicia Huberman exits the courtroom, running the gauntlet between reporters, and we get some of the smoothest exposition I’ve ever seen on film. Conflict is the key, here - as the reporters hammer her with questions, we get information about who she is. Alicia gives no information.



Next scene is Alicia at home having a party, drunk off her ass. Everyone is drinking and dancing except one man, back to us, who sits quietly on a chair watching. Alicia tries flirting with him, gets nowhere... but that only makes her want him more. She kicks out everyone but the stranger, and it’s only after they are alone together do we get to see his face - Devlin (Cary Grant). This back-towards-us introduction was also used in RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK with Indiana Jones. It’s a great way to introduce a character using mystery - hey, who is that guy who is at the party and just sitting there? Why aren’t they showing us his face?

Then Alicia wants to go on a picnic (in the middle of the night) and insists on driving (hammered to the point where she can barely walk) and Devlin goes with her. Sitting in the passenger seat, hand ready to grab the wheel, he watches as she swerves all over the road. Hitchcock uses the same POV concept he’ll use in NORTH BY NORTHWEST, putting the audience behind the wheel. It’s a great, tense, scene - because Devlin needs to allow her to drive like a maniac in order to win her trust. Hey, he might die in the process! His love for his continued existence vs. his duty to the CIA to win her trust.



Scene DNA: Back in the March 2000 issue of Script Magazine I had an article called Making A Scene that contained this theory of mine about your screenplay’s DNA. Every scene in your screenplay should also be a microcosm of the story and should contain the DNA necessary to clone the script. You should be able to read any scene from your script and have some idea of what the whole script is about. This usually comes down to your script’s central conflict and theme - those two elements should be present in every single scene of your screenplay. The Central Conflict is where your *emotional conflict* and your *physical conflict* (the plot) intersect. You can usually find the theme through the central conflict, or find the central conflict through the theme. In NOTORIOUS the central conflict is Love vs. Duty - and that can be found in almost every scene in the film. This is part of what I call Organic Screenwriting - Each scene has to be integral to the story not just filler material. Each scene should expose character, move the story forward, and deal with the central conflict and theme of the screenplay... the script's DNA.

Our very first scene has Alicia at her father’s treason trial - she loves her father but did not testify on his behalf. This is a question from one of the reporters - and is not answered for over 15 minutes, in a scene where Devlin plays a recording of Alicia arguing with her father about being a Nazi spy. Every scene in between has been about Alicia and her father - her love for him vs. her duty as a patriotic American to be against the Nazis. How can you hate the enemy when your father is one of them? After hearing the recording she tells Devlin that she did not turn him in, and he says that they did not expect her to - she’s his daughter. A line of dialogue full of that Love vs. Duty central conflict! If you only had that one line of dialogue, you could “clone” the movie.



Most of the characters in NOTORIOUS end up in pairs, with the Love vs. Duty conflict between them. There’s Alicia and her father. Alicia and Devlin. Alicia and Sebastian. Sebastian and his mother. Each pair (and several others in the film) deal with the Love vs. Duty central conflict in scene after scene. The *plot scenes* are all about this central conflict - and we will look at some examples in a moment.

The *emotional scenes* are all about the Love vs. Duty question *within* every character. These are characters at war with themselves - they have an internal Love vs. Duty dilemma which is externalized through the situations in the story. In NOTORIOUS all of the characters are at war with themselves over "love" and "duty". Devlin is a man who says he is afraid of women - a lonely man who is all about his job (CIA Agent - actually OSS, but this isn't an espionage history lesson). When we meet him, he is defined by his loneliness - he is alone at a party, interacting with no one. For a while, the focus is on creating situations that point out that he is lonely - and one interesting way to do that is to put him in a bunch of scenes with Alicia who is a hot, seductive woman... and he is constantly pushing her away. She throws herself at him, he rejects her. Though at this point you may not think that is Love vs. Duty - it actually is the *fear of love* vs. duty - the scenes are all about potential romance that Devlin is rejecting because he needs to focus on his work... only we see Devlin looking at her. He desires this woman. The situation in the story puts them *together*, and we know when the leading man and leading woman are together in scene after scene, romance is somewhere on the horizon. Devlin *wants her* but pushes her away.



In order to show him *rejecting* his love for her, we must find a way to show the love exists. Show that Devlin desires her. There’s a great bit on the plane to Rio De Janeiro where they look out the plane window on Alicia’s side at Rio, then Alicia bends over Devlin to look out the window on the other side of the plane - and her face and lips are maybe an inch from his. It’s a “kiss moment” but he does not kiss her. But the *situation* shows us that he wants to kiss her... but is afraid. This is supposed to be a professional relationship, not a personal one. Duty, not love.

There is absolutely no backstory that says Devlin has had his heart seriously broken - but his actions show this, so we understand it. It's all about what characters do, not what they say... and we’ll talk about the subtext in NOTORIOUS in a minute. We also learn about Alicia through her actions - just as Devlin pushes love away, Alicia is jumping into the arms of anyone who will give her love. She's a slut (tramp is the word they use in the film). Now, what does this tell us about Alicia? Hey - we have two people who *need* love, and each is going about it in the wrong way. So, let's create a situation by putting them together! A situation where they are supposed to be working together, *not* falling in love. That situation brings the whole love vs. duty central conflict to the surface.

About 5:45 minutes into the movie, Alicia says there’s nothing like a love song to give you a good laugh.

About 20:00 minutes into the movie, Devlin says he’s always been afraid of women.

Once they get to romantic Rio, their actions at odds with each other - Alicia throwing herself at Devlin and Devlin deflecting her. But here's the depth part - not deflecting her because he isn't interested, deflecting her because he *is* interested. He is at war with himself. We have established that he is lonely, we have established that he is afraid of love - those two things would remain internal if not for Alicia. The key to screenwriting is to take what is internal and make it external - which is how it is completely different than novels. We have only two senses in screenplays - sight and sound. We have to find ways to show Devlin’s emotional conflict through *situations* and *actions*... and sometimes the absence of expected actions. We also have the location working for us - this is romantic Rio, the perfect place to fall in love, and they are together almost 24/7. So Alicia is everything he wants *and* everything he fears. The situations - the scenes - are designed to force Devlin to deal with this again and again. His *duty* is to be with her in Rio while they wait for their assignment, but that means he must be constantly fighting his love for her.

But he loses that fight. In a scene similar to the plane “non-kiss”, Devlin and Alicia are sight seeing while waiting for their assignment, and she looks at the view - placing her face an inch from his. This time, he kisses her... and she kisses him back... and they become a couple. The most dysfunctional romantic pair ever put on film.

Devlin and Alicia are two wounded people who fall in love. Devlin lets down his armor and falls in love with her. That means our story must do something to poke a stick at the fear inside him... the fear that she will break his heart. So we get a great dilemma - Love vs. Duty, our central conflict - the CIA tells Devlin what Alicia's job will be... she has to sleep with a Nazi (Alex Sebastian) and find out what he is up to. Now we get two scenes back-to-back: Devlin tells the CIA guys she won't do it, she's not that kind of woman, she's reformed. They laugh this off - she's a slut. Next scene - Devlin has to tell Alicia what the mission is. And, because he's afraid that she doesn't really love him (heartbreak fear) he sets it up to be *her* decision. That way, in that game playing method of rocky relationships, by refusing the job she will be professing her love for him. But it takes two to play games, and she decides to say "yes" and see if he tells her she shouldn't do it. Guess what? This screws up everything, and each thinks the other doesn't truly love them, and now she's gonna go screw some Nazi and report back to Devlin about it. Can you imagine a worse situation for either of them? A more painful situation for Devlin? And the big problem is - his job, his *duty*, is to have the woman he loves screw some other guy. That's the concept of the film - the basic situation of the story. It's the logline. And that love vs. duty aspect is in almost every scene of the film. Since the *story* is about a man who must order the woman he loves to sleep with some other guy, that central conflict is part of all of the plot scenes *and* part of all of the emotional scenes. The big emotional conflict is having characters do the thing they would never do... the thing that hurts them most.

For Devlin to be a good CIA Agent, he must make sure Alicia screws that Nazi like crazy! But, for Devlin to be a happy person, she can not screw the Nazi. He is at war with himself - love vs duty. Every scene becomes *emotional* and every scene has his character in conflict with himself.

And, because this is a movie - about things that happen rather than about thoughts and feelings - Alicia SCREWS THE NAZI. AND KEEPS SCREWING HIM! AND TO NOT BE SUSPICIOUS, MUST PRACTICALLY SCREW HIM IN FRONT OF DEVLIN. Scene after scene, situation after situation, she must seem to select Alex Sebastian over Devlin - and Devlin must WATCH this and even participate in it. These situations are created so that Devlin, who loves Alicia, must practically push her into another man's arms (and bed) because it is his *duty*.



There is a great scene where Alicia *reports* to Devlin that she has added Sebastian to her list of “playmates”. That’s one of those scenes where you wonder how the censors let that slip past. You don’t need a decoder ring to figure out what she means - she screwed him. They aren’t married, there is no talk of marriage at this point... but she screwed him. And Devlin, trying to act businesslike, tells her “good job”. But you know that isn’t what he’s thinking... or feeling.

Later, after Alicia and Sebastian have been screwing for a while, she goes to see the CIA boss and Devlin for advice - Sebastian has asked to marry her. Hey, one thing to push the woman you love into the bed of another man... a bigger thing to says she should *marry* him. That takes her off the market. That’s permanent. But that’s what the situation forces Devlin to do. It’s a great scene, because Devlin ends up trying to find some *business* (duty) reasons why they should not get married... but ends up finding the solution to every objection he comes up with. He’s the one who realizes their marriage may be bad for his heart, but it’s good for the mission.



Because the marriage creates an excuse to throw a big party... where Devlin and Alicia can search the wine cellar and find out what the Nazis are up to. At that big party there are numerous scenes and bits where Devlin and Alicia desperately want to be together... but he must hand her over to Sebastian. There are 3 or 4 scenes in that sequence where this happens - the big one where Alicia and Devlin have gone to the wine cellar together, discovered that the Nazis are working with uranium, and are almost discovered spying (duty) by Sebastian, but they pretend to be kissing (love) so that he wioll not suspect. Only problem - they both really want to kiss each other and do not want to stop.

And every time Devlin must push her into the arms of Sebastian, we feel awful for him. How can a man do that? How can he live with that? How can he stand there and watch the woman he loves with someone else? How can he be the one who forced her to be with that other person - and in scene after scene keep forcing her to be with him. But that is his *job*, his *duty*. Scene after scene deals with this central conflict - you could pick any random scene and find that central conflict and use it to clone the rest of the script. Once you have that central conflict, that war within the character that is also the plot, you have to create scenes that externalize it into a series of battles.

BIGGEST TO SMALLEST - ALL ONE SHOT:


And all of the other characters are different aspects of that Love vs. Duty conflict *illustrated*. We’ve looked at Devlin and Alicia's *love vs. duty* aspects, let's look at the other characters: The Nazi, Alex Sebastian (Claude Raines), is a great character - a sad little man in love with a hottie. To give us the love vs. duty thing - he discovers that Alicia (woman he loves) is really a CIA agent - what does he do? He goes to his smothering mother (Madame Konstantin) for advice, “Mother, I have married an America agent” - love and duty in the same sentence *again*! When Sebastian tells her that Alicia is a spy, she has to pit her love for her son (which is kinda creepy) against her duty as an evil Nazi - if she exposes Alicia as a spy to the other Nazis, she may get rid of the woman who is coming between her and her son... but also putting her son in danger - the other Nazis will probably kill him.

So they decide to slowly poison her, and tell the other Nazis that she is ill. And that’s as far as I’m going to go with the plot, in case you haven’t seen the movie. I don’t want to spoil all of it. But when you watch the film, look at scenes like the one with Poor Emil, who freaks out in front of Alicia when he thinks the wine they are serving with dinner might be Uranium. All of the Nazis love Emil, he’s a very sweet guy, but they decide he’s let his emotions get in the way of business by freaking out like that, and the only way to resolve it is to kill him. This is a great scene because it does so many different things at once - it is “love and duty” and shows just how evil the Nazis are (they are killing their friend) and telling us the wine bottle is the MacGuffin and - what we don’t know at the time - completely setting up the end of the movie!

You can take any scene in NOTORIOUS and find a Love vs. Duty decision in the center of it - the DNA of the story - and use that DNA to clone the rest of the story. Each scene, each line, each character is a *part* of the whole. Nothing tacked on from the outside. Nothing that does not belong.

Subtext: The great thing about these Love vs. Duty situations is that they are overflowing with subtext. NOTORIOUS is one of those films where every line of dialogue has multiple meanings - usually the “duty” line that has a “love” second meaning. This allows the dialogue to be subtle - the situations are so emotionally charged there’s no need for big dramatic dialogue.



One of the scenes I use whenever I teach my 2 day class is the one where they finally take a chance on love, and Alicia plans on cooking him dinner (even though in a previous scene she said she hates to cook - so this is a big thing for her) and she talks about marriage... hinting that she would not be opposed to a long term relationship with Devlin (again, this is a party girl who is used to one night stands and no permanent romantic attachments)... except the conversation is all about preparing chicken. When she talks about the domestic act of making dinner, she’s really talking about *their* domestic future. Oh, and I guess I should mention that this conversation takes place during what was the record for the longest kiss in screen history! Couldn’t be a single sustained kiss, the censors would not allow that, so it is a liplock and a line of dialogue and a liplock and a line of dialogue with the two of them tangled in each other’s arms the whole time. Sexy as hell!



Focus Objects: I have a Script Tip on suspense “focus objects” that uses NOTORIOUS as an example. A “focus object” is an item that creates suspense - like the unraveling rope bridge support in adventure films. The wine bottles are great focus objects in the film, first in the scene where Emil freaks at the bottle being served with dinner - you wonder what’s in it? When they pour it and it is only wine, the question becomes - the why did Emil freak? When Devlin and Alicia search the wine cellar - they are looking for a similar bottle... and find a bunch of them. Devlin accidentally breaks one, exposing Uranium ore. Now he must clean it up against the clock - with Sebastian climbing down the stairs! They find a similar bottle, empty the wine and fill it with the ore, and replace it on the shelf. When Sebastian searches the wine cellar later, looking for something out of place, he looks from vintage year label to vintage year label on the shelf of “uranium bottles” - and one year is not like the others... the one Devlin replaced. The bottle out of place is what creates the suspense in the scene.



And the wine cellar key is the focus of the big party scene and the scenes before and after. Alicia, as Mrs. Sebastian, has access to the keys to every room... except the wine cellar. Since Emil freaked at a wine bottle, Devlin is sure that is the key to whatever those pesky Nazis are up to... and orders Alicia to steal the key. There is a great scene where she steals the key from Sebastian’s key ring while he is dressing for the party only a few feet away. She gets the key - it is in her hand - when Sebastian approaches her, grabs both of her hands! He tells her how much he loves her (as she is stealing the key as part of her spy duties) and lifts one of her hands, opens it... (the empty one, close call) and kisses her palm. Then goes to kiss the other hand... but Alicia pulls him into her arms so that he’ll forget about the hand with the key in it. Distracts him with some lovin’ so he won’t find the stolen key. That’s *before* the party, where the key is the focus as Alicia palms it off to Devlin and eventually Sebastian realizes the key is missing from his ring when he and the butler go down to get some more champagne. That key is the center of about 15 minutes of the film!



There’s also a great “twitch” in the story - an object that has a symbolic and emotional meaning. When Alicia wants to go on that midnight picnic at the beginning of the film she is wearing and outfit with a bear midriff, and Devlin jokes that she might catch cold and ties his handkerchief around her waist. That handkerchief becomes a symbol of their relationship, and there’s a heart breaking scene where she returns it to him... because she’s now screwing that Nazi morning, noon and night. Whenever you can take an object and give it an additional meaning, you can tell your story without words.



Ticking Clock Also whenever I do the two day class I sometimes use the champagne at the party as an example of unusual ticking clocks. Those big red LEDs on the sides of bombs are a complete cliche, and not every film is about a bomb. But there are a million other things that can be used as a “ticking clock” to create suspense. In NOTORIOUS at that big party there is a huge ice bucket full of champagne bottles - and everyone at the party is drinking champagne. Devlin and Alicia will be breaking into the wine cellar, where the rest of the champagne is, to search for the freakout wine. If the champagne in the bucket runs low, Sebastian will need to go down to the wine cellar to get more... except he can’t because Alicia has stolen his key. So, every time they pull another bottle of champagne from that bucket, it’s like minutes ticking away on the clock. This is a great device - and when Alicia or Devlin is offered a glass of champagne and they turn it down, it’s strange and suspect. Hey, it’s a party!



Sound Track: Big, lush, romantic music from Roy Webb, who scored CAT PEOPLE and LEOPARD MAN and MURDER MY SWEET and many other noir films. If the NOTORIOUS score sounds familiar to you, it’s because it gets nicked all the time for parody films with big soapy romantic scenes.

NOTORIOUS is one of those films that doesn’t seem to age - sure it’s in black and white (cinematography by the great Ted Tetzlaff) and is about Nazis and World War 2, but the raw emotions that run through every scene and the sophisticated story about a woman who screws for her country (still amazing that they let them make the film!) seem more modern than half of the films made today. Romance, suspense, drama... all in one great film!

NEXT FRIDAY: THE PARADINE CASE... the movie Hitchcock quit!

- Bill

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Thursday, May 16, 2013

Lancelot Link: The Wrath Of C.H.U.M.P.

Lancelot Link Thursday! This is STAR TREK weekend... and I wonder what will happen with GATSBY and IRON MAN 3? No matter what - Hollywood's Summer is HERE! It was 103 degrees for a couple of days in Los Angeles, too. Here are this week's links to some great screenwriting and film articles, plus some fun stuff that may be of interest to you. Brought to you by that suave and sophisticated secret agent...




Here are a dozen links plus this week's car chase...


1) What You Need To Know About STAR TREK: INTO DARKNESS (and they don't tell you that the villain is Harry Mudd!)

2) Writing For STAR TREK - the original TV series!

3) *Everyone* gets rejected. Everyone.

4) When You Do Get Published, Other Writers Dump On You.

5) Drew Pearce, co-writer of IRON MAN 3... and a *stack* of other films!

6) Roger Deakins On Cinematography.

7) What's Hot At Cannes?

8) WILD BUNCH remake? What will they remake next?

9) The Film No One Wants To Be Associated With?

10) Co-Writer Nightmares - He Steals Your Script And Sells It And It Becomes A Hit Film!

11) Q&A With Mystery Novelist Walter Mosley.

12) Read A Script A Week? Here's a good list.

Not a car chase...



- Bill

Wednesday, May 15, 2013

Script To Screen:
BLACK THUNDER Car Chase

Over on one of the message boards someone is *again* asking how to write an action scene, and isn't easier to just write "Hero kicks villain's ass" and let the stunt guys figure it out. Problem with that is that an action film is about the action - would you write a comedy script and leave the jokes up the the actors? We want our scripts to give the reader the feeling of the movie - the *whole* movie. The reason why we go to action movies is for the action... and the story and characters. Which is another thing about action scenes - they are character scenes and story scenes as well (or they are just junk). Part two of my article on action scenes is in the issue of Script Magazine on news stands, now. One of the things I say in that article is to read some scripts with great action scenes.

Now, the truth is that sometimes, no matter how great that action scene you wrote, the stunt guys *do* come up with their own scene. I've bitched before about some of my action scenes being tossed in favor or scenes that not only were not about the character and didn't move the story forward - they sucked. In one of my films I wanted to smash that bad action cliche scene where Chuck Norris is surrounded by Ninjas, as each wait their turn to have Norris hand their ass to them. So I figured out how one man could fight a bunch of guys if they all attacked him at once. I wrote it up, it was a scene everyone loved in the script, and then the stunt guy tossed it out and had each of the bad guys wait their turn to get stomped by Don "The Dragon" Wilson. Very frustrating.

But sometimes the stunt guy is smart enough to get what you've written, and put that scene on screen. That happened in a few of my films, including BLACK THUNDER. Though that film had all kinds of other problems, it's one that I can watch without wanting to put out my eyes with a firepoker during the closing credits. So I thought it might be fun to look at the Chase Scene on the page, then see what they put on screen. Below is the *first draft* of the chase scene, but I don't think it went through much rewrite. After the scene is what they shot, and what aired on Showtime as one of their original movies.

THE SCRIPT (first draft):



EXT. HANGER -- DAY

Two big ugly bombs on the fork lift. Ratcher watches the biological weapons loaded onto the Nova. Stone startles him.

STONE
How much longer?

RATCHER
Almost loaded and ready for delivery. I'll get suited up.

STONE
Be in the air in one hour. Goodbye Kansas, goodbye yellow brick road.
Ratcher glares at Stone as he walks away.

EXT. LIBYAN TOWN -- DAY

The ancient pick up truck backfires and sputters away. Conners hidden in back amongst the melons and produce.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY
Rojar drives through the village.

ROJAR
You like the American Cowboy?

MELA
What about the check point?

ROJAR
We drive through.

MELA
They won't want to know where you're going?

ROJAR
I tell them the air field. Even the pilots like the fresh melons.

MELA
What if they search the truck?

ROJAR
He's hidden good. Casabas over him.

MELA
If they look under the casabas?

ROJAR
We see if this old fruit cart can out run a motorcycle.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

They leave the village, headed to the check point, and the air field a mile beyond it.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

The truck stops behind a beat up Peugeot waiting to pass through the check point.

A pair of SOLDIERS search the Peugeot, popping the trunk, looking behind the seats. Practically stripping it.

A pair of army motorcycles are parked behind the kiosk.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela watches the Soldiers search the Peugeot, tearing it apart. Tension: They will soon do this to the pick up truck.

EXT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Under the casaba melons, Conners stays very still.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

The Soldiers lets the Peugeot pass through, and gesture for the pick up to move forward.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

ROJAR
Here we go.

Rojar moves the truck up to the gate and puts on a smile. Mela is tense. Suspense builds as the Soldiers approach.

ROJAR
Hey! I have the melons for the men down there. Pilots love the melons.

SOLDIER
Out of the truck. Let's see your papers. Hers, too.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

Rojar steps out of the truck and shows the Soldier his papers. Mela hands her papers through the open window to Soldier #2.

EXT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Under the casaba melons, Conners stays very still.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

As the Soldier examines his papers, Rojar moves to the back of the truck and pulls back the tarp a little.

ROJAR
See? Melons. Fresh fruits and vegetables. Chick-peas. I have to deliver before the sun comes up, to keep them from spoiling.

Rojar lowers the tarp back into place. The Soldier hands him back his papers, then raises the tarp himself.

ROJAR
Hey? You want one? They won't notice if a couple are missing. Don't touch them all with those filthy hands!

The Soldier begins digging around in the crates of vegetables.

EXT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Under the casaba melons, Conners stays very still.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela takes her papers back from the Soldier, trying NOT to look at the search of the pick up bed.

The truck keys dangle from the ignition... She may be forced to scoot to the drivers seat, start the truck, and take off.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

The Soldier reaches a hand between the crates, feeling around.

EXT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Under the casaba melons, Conners stays still as the hand feels RIGHT NEXT TO HIM.
Close...
VERY close!

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

Rojar gets ready to brain the Soldier with a melon if he finds Conners. Tension builds.

Then the Soldier pulls his hand out, lowers the tarp, and takes the melon from Rojar with a smile.

ROJAR
You'll like that one.

Rojar gets back into the truck's cab, gets the ignition on.

Then Soldier #2 notices that Mela looks very much like one of the photos of dissidents on his clipboard. He shows the photo to Soldier #1.

SOLDIER
Halt! Halt!

Rojar slams the truck into gear and roars away, smashing the gate-arm into a dozen pieces.

SOLDIER
Halt! Halt!

Soldier #2 raises his rifle and opens fire. Bullets spark over the back of the truck.

EXT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

A melon explodes, raining juice on Conners.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

Soldier #1 joins in the shooting. Sparks off the pick up.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela and Rojar duck as the back window is BLOWN out.

ROJAR
Down! Stay down!

Rojar whips the pick up truck around a corner on the dirt road at high speed, rolling some melons out the back.

EXT. GUARD KIOSK -- DAY

The two Soldiers hop on their motorcycles and give chase.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

The Pick Up Truck roars down the dirt road.
The Two Motorcycles roar after it.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela sees the motorcycles.

MELA
They're right behind us.

ROJAR
I knew I should have put the new spark plugs in.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

The Two Motorcycles are getting closer.

Soldier #1 breaks away, zooming up to the driver's side window of the truck.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela looks across Rojar at Soldier #1, who is aiming his gun through the window, preparing to fire.

MELA
Down!

Rojar and Mela duck as the bullet whizzes through the cab, in one window and out the other.

Rojar grabs a melon from the seat and throws it out the window at Soldier #1.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

Soldier #1 has to pull back to avoid being hit by the melon.

Soldier #2 opens fire through the back window, shattering glass and exploding melons.

Suddenly, the tarp flips up and Conners pops to his feet in the pick up bed. He double draws his two 45s in one fluid motion and begins blasting away at Soldier #2.

Soldier #2 stops firing and starts zig-zagging, as bullets blaze all around him. One sparks off his handlebars.

Conners shifts aim, firing at Soldier #1.

Soldier #1 fires at Conners, bullets sparking off the cab.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Rojar tries to outrun the motorcycles, but the pick up truck just doesn't have the guts.

He sees Soldier #1 zooming closer to the truck to shoot at Conners, and jambs the wheel to the left.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

The pick up truck weaves towards the motorcycle, and Soldier #1 has to back off.
Conners fires at him with both guns, bullets sparking off the cycle, but missing Soldier #1. Lucky.

Soldier #2 is roaring up on the right side of the truck.

Conners and Soldier #1 exchange gunfire, bullets sparking.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

ROJAR
Hold on!

Rojar has to turn the wheel quickly, to make a sharp corner.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

Almost losing Conners from the back of the truck as he fights for balance. As he tries to right himself, Soldier #1 blasts at him, exploding several melons.

CONNERS
Who taught you how to drive?

ROJAR (O.S.)
Sorry!

Conners drops clips, reloads, and blasts at Soldier #1.

That's when Soldier #2 attacks. Riding VERY close to the back of the truck, he opens fire at Conners.

Conners hits the dirt (melons) as bullets fly overhead from both sides. He grabs the tarp, yanks it off its hooks, and tosses it over Soldier #2.

Soldier #2 is driving his motorcycle blind: The tarp completely covering him like a poncho. He drops his gun and grabs at the tarp, trying to tear it off. Steering the cycle with the other hand.

Soldier #1 opens fire, Conners blasts back with both guns.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

The road curves, and Rojar begins his turn.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

Soldier #2 can't see that the road curves, and bumps up onto the shoulder, zooming over the dirt towards a tree.

Conners and Soldier #1 continue blasting at each other. With the pick up truck shaking, and Soldier #1 zig-zagging, Conners can't get a good shot.

CONNERS
Bullets are too small.

Then he notices the melons.

Soldier #2 is getting CLOSER to the tree. He finally yanks the tarp off, sees the tree, corrects his steering, and zooms back after the pick up truck.

Conners kicks melons at Soldier #1. The third melon hits the front wheel, sending the cycle flipping into a ditch.

Soldier #2 zooms up to the passenger side, and jumps onto the truck. His cycle zooms away.

Standing on the running board, he reaches inside the truck, grabbing Mela and punching her in the face.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Mela fights with Soldier #2, as Rojar drives. She knocks him away... but he swings into the truck bed, fighting Conners.

EXT. DIRT ROAD IN COUNTRY -- DAY

Conners fights Soldier #2 in the bed of the speeding truck.

ROJAR (O.S.)
Hit him! Use the strangle hold!

Soldier #2 socks Conners in the face, almost knocking him off the truck. Conners barely hangs on, kicks the soldier away. They trade punches until Conners knocks him off the truck.

CONNERS
Splash two soldiers.

INT. PICK UP TRUCK -- DAY

Conners yells at Rojar.

CONNERS
Go back! We have to make sure they don't radio the hanger!

ROJAR
Go back? You're crazy!

Rojar yanks the truck into a 180 slide, almost losing Conners. The truck zooms back to the fallen soldiers.

EXT. EDWARDS AFB -- DAY

Establishing shot.

INT. OPERATIONS ROOM -- DAY

DeMuth looks up as General Barnes enters.

DEMUTH
No word, sir. A little over two hours left on the clock.

BARNES
Is the strike team ready?



THE FILMED SCENE:



Okay, that segment of the screenplay is exactly 7 pages long (I cut it at the end of the page) and the segment of film is five and a half minutes. You can see that there were some changes made when it finally came to shooting it - some *better* stunts ended up in the final film. I would never have imagined Conners throwing one soldier at the other soldier's vehicle - that just sounds dangerous! But the stunt guy took what I had and *improved it*, which is what all writers want. We want them to ADD their skills to ours.


SLUGLINES


Though once they have filmed the chase, an editor is going to cut back and forth a zillion times between vehicles and INT and EXT, and maybe from vehicle to vehicle, in the script stage we are going to use sluglines to create suspense or a twist or a reversal or a “button”. We want the reader be excited by the chase – and give them the experience of the film viewer. Where a film editor is going to cut maybe a hundred times, doing that on the page would be choppy and distracting. So we want to cut *for effect*. When you go from EXT to INT in the script there is a reason - usually to create suspense or some other excitement. There may be a cliffhanger or a “button” or a reversal or some other kind of twist at the end of the EXT before we go to the INT or vice versa. You *use* the change of location within the scene to make the scene more exciting. It's not just arbitrary.

There's a bit in my car chase where Rojar, driving, has to do a very sharp turn... and we go from INT to EXT to see our hero standing in the back of the truck as he loses balance, almost falling out, *due to the sharp turn*. There is a cause and effect thing there - where the reader thinks making that hairpin curve is the excitement... but that's what causes our hero to almost get killed! You want to guide the focus of the reader/audience to increase the excitement of the scene on the page. Though the filmed version may be different, our job as screenwriters is to make the scene exciting and involving on the page.


ACTION IS STORY AND CHARACTER


Every action scene is a character scene and a story scene – it's not *only* there to provide excitement. If you can cut the action scene from the screenplay and the screenplay still works – cut the action scene! There's more on this in the revised version of my “Secrets Of Action Screenwriting” book. In this story the protagonist has been hiding since his mission went south, and this scene is when he erupts into action. This is basically the end of Act 2 and the beginning of Act three, and this chase leads into the big action scene at the end.

The story: terrorists steal our new ultra-stealth fighter plane (push a button and it is invisible to the human eye) with plans to use it against us, and hero Vince Conners and his co-pilot Rick Jannick fly behind enemy lines to steal it back. But once they get behind enemy lines, everything goes wrong... Jannick is captured and Conners goes on the run. Now he is behind enemy lines - with an entire enemy army searching for him. Now he must rescue his partner and steal the plane.

Here are two Script Tips I wrote about the creative process of writing this script, one on how the theme is connected to everything in the story (including this scene) and one on how I found a character key to help me understand the motivations of the characters:

Concept And Theme.
Keys To Your Story.


At this point in the story Conners has not trusted Mela (who may be working for the underground or may be the mistress of a badguy... or both) - and this action scene is when they begin working as sort of a team. He must make the decision to trust here. Both things change the course of the story from this point on - and the end of the script could not exist without this scene.

These things also tie into character, but the big thing in this scene is that he has been completely by the book in the story - not taking any chances. This compares to his partner Jannick (who is a captive at this point) who was always reckless and takes wild chances – which is what got him captured. This action scene is where Conners begins taking chances... and crazy ones... and kind of switches personalities with his partner - who is in a scene just before this as a prisoner, no longer taking chances - he has given up. Using the melons as a weapon and having the truck go back for the motorcycle are both things designed to show that he is now taking crazy chances and doing things that will result in the bad guys finding him... or him finding the bad guys. Some of the things in the scene are two-fers: they show the change in character and change the story - but story and characters are connected so that makes sense.


SCENES WE HAVEN'T SEEN


You also need your action scene to be original and fresh – something we haven't seen before. Think of all of the hundreds of car chases – our job is to do something different.
This particular scene began as a joke: when I wrote this screenplay I was on a film message board with Roger Ebert and one of the movie cliches he often pointed out was the “fruit cart” - in a car chase one of the cars always ran into a fruit cart, spraying melons and fruits all over the street... so I thought it would be funny to have the fruit cart be one of the vehicles in the chase, and created Rojar Ebair The Produce King and his truck full of melons and fruit... and I would *use* the melons as weapons! I haven't seen “melon-fu” before in a film, have you? Once I had that, I brainstormed up a bunch of produce action gags. I was also influenced by the Yakima Canutt action scene from John Ford's STAGE COACH – but used motorcycles instead of horses. I also tried to come up with as many “gags” as possible that would put our hero in harms way. An action scene isn't exciting unless the hero can die... and *almost* dies again and again. If the hero isn't in danger, where is the excitement?

We want to create visceral actions, create emotions in the audience, which means the protagonist has to be in harms way - it's not just machines in the car chase, it is *people*. In SALT she jumps from the roof of one truck to another... and almost falls off - visceral action. How many times does Indiana Jones *almost die* in RAIDERS OF THE LOST ARK? Part of the reason why we cut back and forth from INT to EXT on the page is to create that excitement where the protagonist *might* die. One of the basic elements of an action scene is the *reversal* - more on that in the Action Book, but there's also a Script Tip in rotation on reversals in action that uses the big chase at the end of ROAD WARRIOR as an example. We want to use screenwriting techniques to make the script as exciting to read as the film will be to watch. To *use* our writing to create a visceral and emotional experience for the reader.

Eventually our writing gets transferred to the screen, and the scene may end up different (as this scene did) – but without that basic template of how the scene works to begin with, you may end up with a pointless action scene that isn't story or theme or character related.

Now, I have had all kinds of run ins with directors, but let me take a moment to thank the director of BLACK THUNDER, Rick Jacobson. There are directors you hate, directors you tolerate, and directors you like and would gladly work with again. Rick is the latter. We made two films together, and he was always a nice guy. There were no ego battles - we were both just trying to make the best movie possible. That's not to say that Rick and I agreed on everything - we had some battles, and I lost some of them. But Rick was always trying to make a good movie - he cared. And one of the great things about Rick is that he knew that good action scenes were important to an action movie. I've had other directors who pretty much cut the action scenes to spend more time on one B actor having a conversation with another B actor. No one watches a B action flick for the amazing performances... they want to see stuff blow up. Rick spent the time, and *used his imagination* to make the action scenes (and other scenes) really work. Rick also could make a film shot on a small budget look big - he has an eye for shots and angles and lighting, and his films always looked like big studio movies. I've worked with other directors who could make a $3 million HBO flick look like a $300k low budget film. I think Rick is working in TV, now, where his ability to work fast without sacrificing quality is a major plus.

Also, thanks to that amazing stunt department, and coordinator Patrick Statham. Cole McKay and Kane Hodder and the rest of the guys took what I wrote and made it real - which is what we all dream of. Having our words turned into pictures.

7 pages of script = 5.5 minutes of film... not exactly 1 = 1, but close enough. If it ain't on the page, it can't be on the screen.

- Bill

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Tuesday, May 14, 2013

Free Book Day!

On Wednesday the 15th I’m doing a *free* promotion of the Supporting Characters Blue Book - sorry to those of you who just bought it. Even though I did a bunch of work expanding it and like how it turned out... it’s not a big seller. I would like to change that, and I need your help.

First: Please tell every writer you know that the book is free on Wednesday. Just go to Amazon and you’ll see the price is $0.00 and click on it. They don’t need a Kindle device - all you need to do is download the *free* program. You can read the book on your computer, tablet, even phone.

Second: After you (and your friends) (and total strangers you may send this info to) read the book, please write a review on Amazon. That’s the deal - get the book for free, write a review on Amazon. I’m not saying you have to write a *good* review, I want you to be HONEST. But write a review.

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Here’s the thing - Supporting Characters has *three* reviews total. SAVE THE CAT has *420* reviews as I write this. I need more reviews on all of my books! People e-mail me how much they liked the book, and I thank you all for that, but reviews on Amazon help people make up their minds if they want to buy the book or not.

Third: I think one reason why people don’t write reviews on Amazon is that they don’t know what to say. So here are some suggestions:

A) The Blue Books sell for $2.99, and the average screenwriting book at that price has 60-72 pages... the Blue Books all have 150-210 pages. Supporting Characters is 164 pages. So, even if you got it for free, was it worth the retail price? Was it a good value?

B) What was your favorite part or tool from the book? Explain why.

C) What did you learn from the book? List the things and maybe explain them a little.

D) Were there tools and techniques in the book that you have never read anywhere else?

E) Were there a good variety of examples, and what examples were most helpful?

F) Was the book a pleasant read, or was it boring or dry or too academic?

G) Would you recommend this book to other Screenwriters? How about Novelists?

One of the problems is that Amazon requires a certain number of words for a review, and some people would rather just click the “like” button because they don’t know what to say. Hopefully those will give you someplace to start.

If you bought the other books, please take a minute or two to go to Amazon and write a review. It’s strange to have books with only 3 or 4 reviews that are in the Top 20 sales! I’m not a big company with a marketing budget and adverts in magazines and newspapers - it’s just me. I want to keep the price low - Act Two Blue Book is (at least) 209 pages for only $2.99 - but that means *you* are my advertising team. Next up is the Story Blue Book, and I think it’ll be over 209 pages... that’s a lot of research and writing! Please help me with this, and I’ll keep the Blue Books (and others) coming.

Thank you.

Wednesday the 15th, go here for a free book: Supporting Characters Blue Book.

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- Bill

Friday, May 10, 2013

Fridays With Hitchcock:
Lifeboat (1944)

Screenplay by Jo Swerling based on a story by John Steinbeck.

You want a contained thriller? Here’s World War 2 fought on a lifeboat. Sure, you can have your guys trapped in a box or trapped in a phone booth talking to a sniper or trapped in the trunk or a car or trapped in some other, maybe smaller, location - but do those stories *work*? Are they exciting? Are they visually interesting? Sure - I can read a screenplay about a guy trapped in a phone booth and it might work on the page - but can it work on the screen? That’s all that really matters - someone might write some script that reads well, but will the *movie* work? If not, it’s crap... and LIFEBOAT ain’t crap. It’s another brilliant Hitchcock experiment... that works.




Imagine doing an entire disaster movie... on a lifeboat. This is the ultimate contained thriller because the scope of the story is huge - World War 2 - and even though the story has a limited cast and a *very* limited location, the story is filled with twists and tough decisions and big dramatic scenes and distinctive characters who form alliances and then break them and form different alliances - changing sides again and again like a whole season of SURVIVOR... and all of this excitement in a contained thriller. Which makes it a great example of how to get the most from the least.

Nutshell: After a German sub sinks their ship during World War 2, a diverse group of people must share a lifeboat adrift in the ocean... with a member of the German submarine crew (which was also sunk). With rations at a minimum (and water running out) they must come up with a plan to rescue themselves... with the help of that German submarine crew member who knows about navigation. Should they trust him?

The survivors are:




Connie (Tallulah Bankhead) - a wealthy writer who is defined by her possessions: her prized typewriter, the diamond bracelet her first husband gave her, her camera, her expensive mink coat, her cigarette case... all of these things she will lose one-by-one while trapped on the lifeboat. A complete diva who only thinks of herself... married a dozen times, currently single. An independent woman.




Kovak (John Hodiak) - a rugged member of the ship’s engine crew, covered with grease and oil and tattoos, he’s the voice of the working man... and so loud he’s close to being a commie. Kovak has no love for the wealthy. Those tattoos? All of the women he’s loved and left behind.




Ritt (Henry Hull) - actually C.J. Rittenhouse, one of the wealthiest men in the world. A completely self-made man, but not snobbish. He had six boxes of Cuban cigars in his cabin, grabbed one when they abandoned ship, and ended up with a box with only one cigar - which is clenched between his teeth for the whole movie. He starts out trying to take control of the lifeboat, but eventually becomes the most docile survivor.




Gus (William Bendix) - wounded sailor, where Kovak is the intelligent working class man, Gus is the uneducated working class man. Prejudiced, paranoid, proud. Worried that his injured leg will keep him off the dance floor... and cause his dance-crazy girl Rosie to hook up with his arm enemy Al the Armenian. His last name isn’t Smith, it’s really Schmidt - he’s of German ancestry - and now rejects his roots.




Sparks (Hume Cronyn) - ship’s radio officer, a quiet man who does his job without question... and half of the romance subplot of the film. When the battles for control of the boat rage, Sparks is on the sideline waiting for it to sort out so that he can go back to work... completely apolitical... until he has no choice.

Miss McKenzie (Mary Anderson) - a nurse onboard the ship on her way to England to follow her married lover, a doctor. She becomes the other half of the romance subplot... and the one who cares for Gus and anyone else sick on the boat. Like Sparks, she has a job to do and doesn’t get involved in the politics... until she has no choice. Then she becomes fierce.




Joe (Canada Lee) - ship’s steward, called “Charcoal” by Connie and “George” by Ritt (George being the generic name for African American servants at the time). Though he had a criminal past, religion turned him around - now he’s a family man who believes God will help solve their problems.




Mrs. Higley (Heather Angel) - new mother with child... rescued by Joe. But when Joe brings Mrs. Higley and her baby onboard, Miss McKenzie checks the baby and it is dead. She is in shock, and no one wants to take the dead baby away from her. When she realizes her baby is dead, she completely gives up on life and keeps trying to kill herself.




Willy (Walter Slezak) - the final survivor brought about the lifeboat is a member of the German submarine crew... who claims to just be a sailor and claims to speak no English and claims to know the correct direction to the British Navy Base at Bermuda. He is smart and resourceful and calm and organized... he has the plan that no one else knows about. He is really the commander of the submarine, has energy tablets and a compass, steals their water, and his course to Bermuda is actually leading them to a German supply ship where they will be captured and sent to concentration camps. He is sure of himself, and does everything he can to keep the others fighting amongst themselves.

What you may have noticed about these nine survivors is that they are not only characters, they are archetypes - symbols - and this allows the script to play out World War 2 with eight characters and one set. One of the great things this script does is use symbols - both the characters in the story and the objects - to make a larger point and sum up complicated pieces of story and information. We’re going to look at those symbols and the series of tough decisions the survivors must make until they are rescued.

Experiment: Hey, it’s 9 people on one lifeboat for 97 minutes! Talk about contained thrillers!



Hitch Appearance: So how the hell does the director do his cameo when it’s 9 people on one lifeboat for 97 minutes? In a newspaper advertizement! Hitch shows up in an ad for “Reduco” on the back page of a newspaper - a fat Hitch and a skinny Hitch. The power of fake newspapers: many folks in the audience thought there was a real product called Reduco and that Hitch had actually lost all of that weight.

Great Scenes: We’re going to look at the use of symbols to compress complicated information and create a visual and action-based method to deal with ideas, how to create a great ending, and also look at how to make a contained thriller exciting and well-paced by creating a series of tough decisions and reversals in a section called...

Dog Juice: Over on my Script Secrets website there’s a tip in rotation about “Dog Juice” - it’s my theory that all dogs, regardless of size, have the exact same amount of energy. So a little Chihuahua has the same amount of energy as a huge St. Bernard... which is why those little dogs have too much energy and those huge dogs end up kind of lazy. Movies are exactly the same - every movie needs to have the same amount of “entertainment energy” - that huge CGI filled all-star blockbuster needs to be just as entertaining as that small film. The big problem with a contained thriller is that we lose the “energy” of going to all kinds of cool locations, and even the “energy” of just cutting away from this location. We’re trapped here! And being at the same location can become boring after a while... and after 97 minutes? People are thinking about what they might want to eat after the movie instead of what’s on screen.

The more you take away, the more you must add - so that the energy level is always equal. A contained thriller takes away a bunch of things, which means we must add energy and excitement to keep it in balance. Usually we end up adding plot twists and increase the pacing of the story. More events, more tough decisions, more big problems that must be solved now. As I probably said in that Script Tip, if you have a big movie star, people will watch them walk down a street because they are a movie star. When you take some no name actor and have them walk down the same street, the audience wants to know why you are wasting their time with this scene. Same scene - but a movie star is “juice”, and that no name actor is not. If you have a conversation between two characters at an amazing location, the location brings some “juice” (energy / entertainment value) to the scene. Same scene in a normal location is less entertaining. When we have only one location for the whole movie, we lose all kinds of energy / entertainment and something has to make up for it.

One of the built in good things with LIFEBOAT is that it takes place in the ocean, so at least the images behind the talking actors are interesting - we get sunsets and storms and that big beautiful ocean. Oh, and those storms add all kinds of excitement - and the ocean seems to be constantly at war with the lifeboat. That’s one of the basics of a survival story - it has a man-against-nature component and that means nature will be trying its damnedest to destroy the humans in its path. They are usually *not* on a calm, placid sea... they are usually in the middle of crashing waves threatening to sink the ship and crazy winds and currents pushing them in the wrong direction. In a man-against-nature movie, nature is out to get us! LIFEBOAT milks this... and if you look at many other contained thrillers like KEY LARGO and MURDER ON THE ORIENT EXPRESS and MISERY, nature often plays a part in a story that is stuck in one location. This is a great way to add excitement to a story that can’t go anywhere. Man against nature is one of the major conflicts in a survival movie, and there are lots of scenes in LIFEBOAT where Mother Nature attacks.

The film also has a bunch of big dramatic decisions that keep the pace moving.

A) When they pull Willy onboard the lifeboat and discover he’s a German, should they throw him overboard because he’s the enemy, or do the humane and human thing that shows they are more civilized than they are?

B) Who should be in charge? This is a decision that gets debated throughout the story and flares up into arguments frequently. At first Ritt takes charge, because he’s rich and owns shipyards, so he’s qualified, right? Except he doesn’t know anything about navigation or sailing... and Kovak, who *does* know how to get the lifeboat moving takes over... but Kovak doesn’t know where they are or what direction they should be sailing.

C) Willy knows the direction to Bermuda... do they trust him? He says he wants to get to safety as much as the rest of them. Oh - he only speaks German, and Connie has to translate for him...

D) Do they trust Connie? What if she and the German are in Cahoots somehow? Connie seems to *champion* the German. When Sparks says he thinks he knows which way to Bermuda, and Willy disagrees, Connie sides with Willy.

E) When they discover that Mrs. Higley’s baby is dead, do they pry it from her arms and throw it overboard or let her hang onto it?

F) And after burying the baby at sea, when Mrs. Higley wakes up and asks where her baby went, what do they tell her and who tells her?

G) Now what do they do with a suicidal Mrs. Higley? Food and water are in short supply... is letting her kill herself a good idea? They end up tying her to the mast...

H) In the middle of the night, on Ritt’s watch, Mrs. Higley jumps over the side of the boat. Do they punish Ritt? Do they divvy up her food?

I) Gus’ leg is getting worse - amputate it?

J) Okay, who cuts it off? Willy? He claims he was a surgeon before the war. Of course, a surgeon never had to operate with a hunting knife in a storm on a rocking boat with only some brandy as an anesthetic.

K) Connie tricks Willy into answering to “Captain” - so he was the captain of the submarine that shelled their ship and killed all of the other passengers and then gave the orders to sink the lifeboats! Okay, do they trust him now?

L) While Willy sleeps, they debate whether Willy’s pocket watch might actually be a compass... and talk reformed pickpocket Joe into stealing it. It *is* a compass! Now what do they do about Willy? He’s probably been guiding them to a German supply ship instead of Bermuda.

M) When a huge storm hits, Willy takes control of the lifeboat, barking orders *in English*, which end up saving all of their lives. He is now commander of the lifeboat. Do they allow this? Do they fight him or do what he says?

N) During that storm, all of their food and water washes out of the lifeboat. They now have no provisions, Willy is captain of the ship, and each blames the other for allowing the food and water to wash away. A huge conflict - and they are all screwed.

Those are some of the highlights of about the first half of the movie... I have *40* decisions and conflicts jotted down in my notes - and let me tell you that things get worse in the last half of the film, and people have to fight harder to survive. And those are the big dramatic decisions, not the small ones - like, when they put it to a vote who should captain the ship, Joe wants to know if he has a vote, too - and we get a discussion of racism and racial equality. And these 40 plus conflicts & decisions are not all of the scenes in the film, there are all kinds of scenes between our lovebirds and between Connie and Kovac, and between Kovak and Ritt (Kovak makes cards from Connie’s notebook and plays poker with Ritt... and keeps winning - luck, skill, or marked cards?) and between Gus and everyone about his dancing future and lose of Rosie. These 40 plus scenes are the “set piece” scenes - and there are many more of them because this is a contained thriller.

Because we can not cut away to some other location, and we aren’t introducing any new characters, the pacing *must* be faster and the scenes more intense. People don’t just talk, they get limbs chopped off in a storm! A contained thriller or contained any kind of script needs just as much excitement and “energy” and “juice” as a screenplay that jets qaround te world and has all kinds of big set piece scenes. Even though it is set on a lifeboat and never gets off of it, LIFEBOAT needs to be just as exciting as NORTH BY NORTHWEST. So we need *more* conflict scenes, *more* big dramatic decisions, *more* twists like Willy speaking English, and more *personal* conflict than in a standard film.

More *personal* conflict: in NORTH BY NORTHWEST we have that great cornfield chase and attack scene, which is big spectacular action-suspense scene. Because we can’t go *big* in a contained thriller, we have to go *deeper* and *more personal*. So in LIFEBOAT we have people get their legs amputated, their babies die, they lose hope and kill themselves - the same amount of “juice” as that cornfield chase. Things are more permanent, more dangerous, and scar people for life. In NORTH BY NORTHWEST, sure Roger is a changed man by the end of the film and almost lost his life a few times... but by the end of LIFEBOAT characters are dead or have limbs removed (they will never dance again) or have killed somebody over stealing water - because we can’t go big, we have to go deep.

Symbolism: Of course, all of the characters in this story are symbolic. Each is some facet of America before we entered World war 2, and the film is really a discussion of whether we should become involved in the war. Though it’s easy to look back and think that fighting Hitler was a no brainer, at the time the public was not interested in fighting another war while we were still digging ourselves out of the depression, and there was even a large popular group in the United States that was on *Hitler’s side*! So this whole film is symbolic - the lifeboat is the United States!

One of the major issue with a screenplay that is a handful of people trapped in a single location is that they tend to get talky, and film is a visual medium. Hitchcock said,"Rely on action to tell your story and resort to dialogue only when it's impossible to do otherwise." Screenplays are stories told in pictures. Modern motion pictures consist of two parts: the picture and the sound. As writers, we are responsible for both... So we need to find a way to use the images to tell the story, and LIFEBOAT uses symbols to create strong visuals. Here are some from the film...

1) Connie’s “trappings” are all symbols. She has a camera that has filmed the ship sinking and the German sub shelling and sinking the lifeboats. She is an *observer* - not involved - and the camera is part of that... Kovak knocks it into the ocean.

2) Connie’s typewriter is the next to go - she is typing up the news story of the ship sinking and it goes overboard... the last thing that makes her a *reporter* of the ship wreck. She is no longer detached and uninvolved - this tragedy is *her* tragedy.

3) Mrs. Higley is wet and freezing, so Connie must give up her mink coat... in a thriller the protagonist is often stripped of everything that identifies them and must be reborn as someone else in order to survive. Connie is the lead in LIFEBOAT and goes through this transformation. The mink coat is her place in society... and she loses it and becomes just one of the survivors on the boat.




4) Mrs. Higley becomes suicidal after she realizes her baby is dead, and they have to tie her to the mast. One morning they wake up and she’s gone. The rope tied to the mast going over the side of the boat into the water. It’s taut - her body dragging underwater behind the boat. Now they must cut the rope - and the act of cutting the rope, leaving the dead behind, it a big moment.

5) When they amputate Gus’ leg, his empty boot is tosses onto the deck of the boat. That is one powerful visual. And that empty boot doesn’t disappear from the deck, it comes into play again and again in the story.




6) The tattoos on Kovak’s chest - he wears his broken hearts for all to see. “Love Letters” is what Connie calls them. Kovak is so practical in the story that this romantic element helps to balance his character and also comes into play as the story goes on. He is a romantic who has been burned, and hardened his heart. There is something underneath his cynicism.

7) Connie’s bracelet is her romantic symbol. Given to her by a past husband, the only one she really loved. She has more valuable jewelry (money) but nothing as valuable (emotions). You can strip her of everything else that defines her, but not that bracelet.




8) Willy’s compass - if you have that compass, you control the boat. You control your destiny.

9) One of the greatest bit of symbolism is Ritt, one of the richest men in the world, playing Joe’s flute for Willy. Serenading Willy with German songs as Willy rows the boat towards the German supply ship that will turn them from survivors into prisoners of war. This is another powerful visual bit that continues through the last half of the film.




10) Sweat and tears. Because they are dehydrated, they can not sweat or cry. But at one point in the story a character does sweat... and that means that character was stealing water from the other survivors. It’s a HUGE moment when we see that sweat. A much better moment than if someone had said: “You stole water!” - we can see the sweat.

11) There’s an action scene near the end where Willy is beaten... with Gus’ boot.

There are some other symbols in the film, from Ritt’s lone cigar to a cigarette lighter to the playing cards to a newspaper that comes between Connie and Kovak. Similar to the “dog juice” of excitement when we are dealing with a contained thriller, we also have a form of “dog juice” when it comes to using the picture part of the film. We still need to have interesting images up there on screen, and use those images to help tell the story. LIFEBOAT makes the most of the props in that boat, turning many of them into powerful symbols.

SPOILERS! SPOILERS! SPOILERS!


Endings: Contained Thrillers often crap out at the end (PHONE BOOTH, anyone... side note - PHONE BOOTH was originally pitched to Hitchcock! Some scripts take a while to hit the screen), but LIFEBOAT manages to have a great ending. Because our story has been so contained - 100% of it takes place in the lifeboat - we need an ending that the explodes out of the screen. The cool thing about LIFEBOAT is that it is a whole disaster movie on one set! So we need a big disaster movie ending, and LIFEBOAT delivers.

Twist-twist-twist! So, once they get rid of Willy, they are screwed. He was not only the only natural leader, he was steering them to the German supply ship and away from Bermuda. They will now die adrift at sea. Then Connie has an idea - her cheap bracelet, the one given to her by the only man she ever loved, would make a good lure for fishing. They rig it to the fishing line, put it in the water... and suspense builds as they try to catch a fish - this is a real suspense scene with a large fish attracted to the lure but not quite taking the bait... then it bites!




As they reel in the fish... Someone spots a ship on the horizon! They are saved! The fishing line is dropped and zips over the edge of the boat - taking Connie’s bracelet with it. As the ship gets closer, they can see the flag - the German supply ship. They will be captured and become prisoners of war.

But here’s the thing - a German supply ship will have *supplies* - food and water. They will get to eat a real meal and drink real coffee... before they are locked up in the brig. At this point, that sounds damned good to all of them. As the supply boat launches its dingy to pick them up, they begin to fantasize about the food they will soon eat.

Then the dingy stops, turns around, and heads back to the supply ship! Leaving them to die in the open sea! From fantasies about food, they now have to deal with dying adrift in this lifeboat. The German supply ship is abandoning them. How can they do that? Why would they do that?

Then, thunder and lightning on the horizon. The German supply ship is leaving them to die in a *storm*.

But it’s *not* thunder and lightning, it’s cannon fire! An American warship! Firing right at them! They are too close to the German supply ship and will be sunk by their own ship! They row away as quickly as they can! Shells raining all around them!

One shells hits the German supply ship, sinking it. A nice big ending to the story, and the American ship is on its way to rescue them. That’s a lot of excitement and a lot of reversals crammed into the few minutes of the ending.

All My Life’s A Circle: The film ends as it begins. The cool thing about the ending is that it is the same as the beginning - the film opens with a ship being shelled and sinking and the folks on the lifeboat and pulling in Willy... and it ends with the German supply ship being shelled and sinking and the folks on the lifeboat and a man climbing up the side of the lifeboat so they haul him in and he says “Danke schoen” just like Willy did... and they all throw him back into the water. A great ending!

Sound Track: Mostly without music... except the flute played by one of the characters.

LIFEBOAT is another Hitchcock experimental film that works - even decades after World War 2. You can’t get any more contained than 9 people on 1 lifeboat - and that this is a *disaster movie*! The characters are well defined and the conflict continues to escalate and all of the performances are really good. I would be remiss if I did not mention that great behind the scenes story about Tallulah Bankhead, who has some aversion to underwear and ruined some takes by flashing the camera and ruined others by flashing fellow actors. Of course, none of this is in the film - that would have it rated NC-17. For a movie with one location, it never gets boring - if anything, the opposite. In one scene, a character notes that they are dying one-by-one while Willy gets stronger - though that might have been symbolic of the United States in the early years of World War 2 when the film was made, today it seems like a disaster movie combined with an AND THEN THERE WERE NONE style serial killer movie. Who will survive?

- Bill

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Wednesday, May 08, 2013

Lancelot Link: Into Dorkness

Lancelot Link Thursday! Hey, this STAR TREK takes place on Earth as well!Wasn't their 5 year mission *in space*? Here are this week's links to some great screenwriting and film articles, plus some fun stuff that may be of interest to you. Brought to you by that suave and sophisticated secret agent...




Here are five links plus this week's car chase...


1) Would YOU Sue Over GI JOE 2?

2) That stupid development executive has been replaced by a computer!

3) Shane Black is Back! And DOC SAVAGE is next!

4) Win the lottery, become a film mogul!

5) Danny Boyle bitches about current films.

6) Does it bother anyone else that, once again, Doug is *not* part of the team in HANGOVER 3... when he's the very reason the other 3 guys (in the poster) know each other?

And the car chase of the week...



- Bill